美国留学综合申请指南(全面解析美国留学申请)

跃工场文书论

普通留学机构方法论
跃工场方法论

跃工场留学学员——张同学

跃工场留学学员——张同学
学生背景分析
国内双非院校本科;经济学专业;GPA:2.78/4;语言成绩:申请时未考托福或雅思;工作经历:3年国际人力资源服务公司工作经历;就业意向:企业招聘官。
学生评价分析
有3年相关领域工作经历,本科学历、绩点、语言成绩均不具竞争优势,英语写作和表达能力亟待改进,需文书老师的指导。
中外老师合力指导
顾问:Jeff老师, 清华大学经管学院硕士,挖掘学生闪光点;文书老师:Tobias老师,剑桥大学管理哲学硕士,帮助完成终稿。
斩获Offer
MSc Human Resource Management 人力资源管理硕士,南安普顿大学
MSc Global Human Resource Management 国际人力资源管理硕士,纽卡斯尔大学
MSc in Human Resource Management 人力资源管理硕士,约克大学

申请尝试

2017年
                           
张同学通过某传统留学中介结构申请,最终申请失败
申请结果

利兹大学

QS世界排名93

未录取

纽卡斯尔

QS世界排名146

未录取

约克大学

QS世界排名148

未录取

卡迪夫大学

QS世界排名154

未录取

利物浦大学

QS世界排名181

未录取

2018年
                           

跃工场帮助张同学再次申请

申请结果

曼彻斯特

QS世界排名27

Waiting List

利兹大学

QS世界排名93

未录取

南安普顿

QS世界排名97

录   取

纽卡斯尔

QS世界排名146

录   取

约克大学

QS世界排名148

录   取

 

其他机构文书样本

   

I have been interested in the field of human resource since a very young age, as my father, who was a huge influence for me, has been working enthusiastically in the service industry for over ten years. One of the most important aspects which I have learned from my father about the current state of human resource in China is that companies in this field tend to have constrains on their development of projects and of using their human resources in more appropriate ways. It was this, among other factors, which convinced me to pursue further education in human resource in the UK…….

   
措辞不当、缺乏吸引力、套用模板

跃工场留学文书样本

   

While the business leaders are often complimented for changing the face of business, the people whose job is to spot these emerging talents are much less recognised. As a human resource professional, I have aspired to become a leader in this field, and I would like to further expand my knowledge in human resource through overseas studies. If given the opportunity to study in the MSc Human Resource Management programme at University of Southampton, I am confident that I would be putting my career in a truly …..

   
定制化、针对性、展现自我